This Weekend Writing Warriors excerpt comes from Jasper City, about an outlaw bent on revenge and the captain appointed to stop him.
Earlier excerpts revealed a more than casual connection between Cynthia Madden and the outlaw Edward Jasper. What happened when the two of them met? Cynthia was full of questions, and Edward had a story to tell. This is part of it:
(First line is spoken by Edward.)
“[Mayor Jasper] didn’t want me dead. He just wanted to make me into an outcast.”
“It would have been easier to kill you,” Cynthia said without thinking. “But I’m not saying that he should’ve done it.”
“I know what you meant. Still, it would have been difficult for him.”
“And why is that?”
“Would you be able to kill your own brother?”
wow, does this mean Edward is related to the mayor? I'm intrigued. Great 8
Super eight. Takes the reader to what happens next in a hurry.
Nice 8! I'm intrigued. I want to know what's up between the mayor and his brother.
Ooh, so are they brothers? That adds a further layer of emotion to the plot all right – intriguing excerpt!
Oh fascinating! This is getting more complicated, in a good way. You're doing a good job with this story.
That adds another dimension. Nice.
Well done with the 8 sentences! Great layer with the family connection.
Wow, now that adds an unexpected twist. Intriguing. I would love to know more.
In some families, I'm sure the answer to that is 'heck, yeah!'
Lots of questions raised–great snippet!
They are indeed brothers. And thank you!
Dun, dun, dun! Didn't see that coming : )