Weekend Writing Warriors: Robot Town

As I’ve continued work on Jasper (its newly simplified title), I plan to start contributing to Weekend Writing Warriors again.

It’s simple and fun. Sign the linky list with your name, blog url and email address on Mondays, 8:00 AM EST. Each week, the list remains open until Saturday, 11:59 PM. Then on Sunday, post 8 sentences from a current writing project, published or unpublished. Visit other participants and offer opinions, critiques, support. Writers hanging out with writers, a good time with a great group of people.

Quite some time has passed since my past excerpts, so I might as well start somewhere new.  This is a scene I’ve added to the story, in which Edward’s family leave their initial camp and retreat to a district in the city almost exclusively populated by sentient robots.  While the robots practice total isolation from the human side of society when they can help it, they apparently have a significant tie to Edward.

“What is going on?” Cynthia asked of nobody in particular.
“You appear to be frightened,” said the Machine who escorted them in. “I have communicated with the others and informed them that you are not a threat.”
Philip spoke up. ”Why’d you bring us here, then?”
In response, the Machine holstered its gun. “I apologize if your fear was my doing. I escorted the four of you in here for your own safety and at the instruction of your companion Edward.”

Next weekend we will see their full motive for doing so.

10 thoughts on “Weekend Writing Warriors: Robot Town

  1. I really like your dialogue. It’s engaging. However, and I hope you don’t mind me saying this, I’m not sure about your narrative in this snippet. It feels like something is missing. How does the machine know they’re frightened? What kind of emotional response does it’s statement about letting others know they’re not a threat create? This is just the questions I developed while reading this snippet. Also, welcome back to the WeWriWa blog hop. 🙂

    1. Thanks and thank you for the feedback! I’ll take your questions into account, but the short answer to one is that the Machine can analyze facial expressions and the like to make educated guesses on human emotion.

  2. I want to find out more… Since I’ve been reading them in the wrong order: who is this robot and why has he brought them here? Looking forward to your last post 😛

    – Sabrina

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