Weekend Writing Warriors: Dex and Lilith 4

And a last minute entry in Weekend Writing Warriors from me!  I like to get these up and running earlier in the day, and typed up earlier in the week.  But 5am workdays do strange things to my brain sometimes.

It’s simple and fun. Sign the linky list with your name, blog url and email address on Mondays, 8:00 AM EST. Each week, the list remains open until Saturday, 11:59 PM. Then on Sunday, post 8 sentences from a current writing project, published or unpublished. Visit other participants and offer opinions, critiques, support. Writers hanging out with writers, a good time with a great group of people.

I’m still continuing the previous scene with Dex and Lilith.  Some light trimming was required.

 

“You’ve been a follower for too long,” Lilith told him.  “Didn’t you ever learn how to lead?”

“I’m not at the top.  Insubordination is still a risk.”

Lilith pushed backward on the swing.  The old, rusted chains squeaked above her. 

“Stay where you are, and you’ll be eliminated eventually,” she said.  “Is that what you believe?”

 

This may be one of my favorite scenes, so I’ll keep running with it next week.

 

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3 thoughts on “Weekend Writing Warriors: Dex and Lilith 4

  1. Love you you broke up the dialogue with this : Lilith pushed backward on the swing. The old, rusted chains squeaked above her. It’s a lovely description but it imbues a real mood as well as a sense of time and place, all in very few words. Well done, loved it.

  2. Nice, I really like this snippet. I love the way these two are so honest with one another, bluntly stating and asking what needs to be said and asked. The challenge here is excellent. Thanks for sharing!

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